Translation Check by Chrouya
Script: KoreZom S2 01 [main] [TL and Timing by Aera_Bibi][+Signs].ass
Workraw: Kore wa Zombie desu ka OF THE DEAD -01 WR 720p.avi

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*Even if they were different in S1, I think using the official names is better in my opinion.*

17
*Gaia is the the god of gods, creator of planets, according to Greek mythology. Father of Zeus.*

23
*wouldn't it be better if you wrote "A chosen...a chosen..."? I didn't understand "a cho" at first.*

34
*She's indeed saying "Mi-miruna!" which means what the TL says.*

//38// check HL alcohol

40
Yeah, and she was really beautiful, too.
*bishoujo cannot be interpreted as cute(this is personality wise)*

46
Have you changed into a lolicon? Disgusting.
*more literal translation*

51
Necromancer, you're grown up but you still believe in ghosts?
*omission of "mou ookii no ni"*

67
Recently, my stomach's been in perfect form.
*lit trans of zekkouchou*

72
*for consistency, go for Yuu (I noticed Hatsuyuki used that instead)*
*I remember Doki using "Eu" every time.*

91
Well, playing house like them is kinda pleasant though.
*isn't heartily kinda different in context*

96
Aikawa's school wife, so I need to serve him.
*the verb is "to serve". Alternatively:
Aikawa's school wife, so I am only devoted to him.

107
Uninterested.
*Uninteresting would imply "Other ingredients are uninteresting", but she's implying "I am uninterested in other ingredients."

117
You're not leaving yet?
*keep it literal and diverse"

126
Daytime is becoming annoyingly longer and longer.
*switched word order and fixed tense*

134
*this sentence sounds a bit strange, it's just like "Alcohol is for 20+ only"*

142
For the taste.
*fuzei also means enjoyment, but she probably means the taste of alcohol in her food.*

185
The fact that he's dressed as a girl makes it extremely ominous.

269
*I'd keep it as is. But...why would a squid be gay...*

329
I don't talk like you're doing now.

339
This voice is added by our weak-hearted protagonist, Aikawa Ayumu's imagination. (Inoue Kikuko)
*typo. Also, maybe add the character voice like (VA: Inoue Kikuko)*